Saturday, June 30, 2012

DAY 30: Numbers Game



It is the most visited object in the British museum.
And now, the Egyptians want it back. The French on the other hand, lay greater claim on it stating it was Napoleon’s property before the British deprived him of it.

Not long after it arrived at the British Museum, The Rosetta Stone was stolen. In other to conceal this fact from the public, the British government had a replica made and then had the inscriptions colored in white chalk and the remaining surface was covered with a layer of carnauba wax. (They claimed the white chalk was to make the inscriptions more legible and the wax was designed to protect The Stone.)

In 1999, the stone was recovered and the counterfeit summarily removed and discarded.
The original was never painted over.
It was widely believed by archaeologists and specialists that the stone was chipped off for reuse at a construction site but recent discoveries have proved otherwise. There was more to the damaged state of The Stone.

Napoleon Bonaparte first discovered The Stone. It is now believed he did not hand over all he possessed concerning The Stone. There were numbers and codes that he held back and hid at different points in the Land of the Ancient Pharaohs.
Where is Napoleon now?
Where are the locations of the hidden fragments?

Nobody knows, for sure. (About the location of the hidden fragments, that is. Of course, we know Napoleon’s long dead.) But, a search has begun, (especially, since the curator of the British Museum was found dead at the spot where the stone had once been displayed and The Stone? . . . you’ll figure it out, eventually.) a search that’s both a manhunt for the murderer and the thief and a quest for the

                        Fragments of the Rosetta Stone.



Notes to myself:
This is the last of ‘em. I survived NaShoWriMo! Yeah!

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Friday, June 29, 2012

DAY 29: Number-One Fan



In the dark, our wildest fantasies gain substance and grow teeth. Especially, teeth.
My name is Narivé and I am Fiction’s Number-One Fan. I know you think I’m crazy as hell but, humor me, okay?

I was in college and going on 16 when the real thrust of my reality dawned on me. It was like sitting in the bleachers and watching yourself act; if that was possible. I was the punch line of every joke, at home and at school. My folks sort of like, their relationship wasn’t working out as planned after the proverbial ‘I do’. I arrived on the scene dead on schedule. Damn I couldn’t have happened on that family at a better, bitter time. They took their drama out on me. When talking wouldn’t fix his hitch, dad punched me around a little bit. He always made sure I stayed alive to regret it.

My problem kicked in when I began to take the taunts and razzes personally. Well, I couldn’t exactly do something about it, could I? I just turned 16 for shuck’s sakes!

Then, I discovered fiction-the door to another world. A place of hiatus. Heaven. I read wide, explored all the genres until the line between what is real and what is conceived blurred. Then, I met Razor.

Razor taught me all I needed to know about life. I met him in the 800-page tome, Raw Edge. And I couldn’t even recall the name of the guy who wrote it if my salvation depended on it. The guy was someone I could dig and I did. His world became my world. I found peace in the dark and the beauty of my universe sprung to life just after dark.

One day, Razor walked into my life. In living flesh and blood. Difference is, only I got to see him.



Notes to myself:
The story is about a fanatic who reads too much into a fictional story and is possessed by a secondary personality.
He hears his favorite character’s voice as much as anybody else’s voice.
The story in the final draft should lean heavily on the dark side of the human nature.
Answer questions like: what does Razor tell him?;
How much does Narivé depend on that voice to carry on his personal affairs?;
Is crime a content of his obedience?;
All-in-all does he subject himself to the dark side of this fictional character to be termed catatonic?

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Thursday, June 28, 2012

DAY 28: Bad Gone Worse (Mutant Strains II)



Zraeli’s neighbor has taken in a very unusual pet and it’s done something gross and unpleasant to both his lawn and his pet. Actually, it chewed off the head of Zraeli’s pit bull and somehow managed to spray the blood over the left side of Zraeli’s house at the same time. The walls on the left wing of his house looked like something had tried to repaint it and failed.
The lawn was a different matter entirely. It was the aftermath of a battle between a T-Rex and a triceratops.

Recently, Zraeli had been hearing strange sounds in the still of the night piercing the air with blood-curdling squeals. Zraeli’s neighbor had been up to something. It probably had a thing to do with his gene-splicing gig up at the MoGenetics Labs where he worked.

One night, (after the incident with his pet pit bull and the odd painting job which he washed off effectively and of course, his messed up lawn) Zraeli kept hearing noises coming from his backyard suggestive of giant slugs slithering around in the starlight. He’d never heard those sounds before and his mind went back to his neighbor especially, his state of mind after all these excessive experiments.

Zraeli got out of bed, fetched his torch and went to the window. He pointed to wherever he spotted movement in the shadows, trying to see what made such noises. He could barely make out the forms. Either they were too dark or too fast. Zraeli whispered a prayer; let it not be the latter. And whatever they are, let them not be dangerous.

Well, the high points of the night was when one of the creatures almost got into the house. It scared the living night lights out of one of his daughters who was sleeping in that room. She claimed she’d seen the creature, said it was a cross between a Dimetrodon (when Zraeli asked her what that was she said it was a prehistoric mammal-like reptile) and a slug-a giant slug. The emphasis here people is giant.

That was the final straw. Zraeli didn’t think it was wise to wait one of those things broke into the house and made a meal out of one his own before he gave their owner a wake-up call.

He got to the neighbors house which was just next door. After a few moments of knocking on the door and unable to evoke a response from the resident, Zraeli tried the knob. The door opened on the first try like it was still midday. More like it wasn’t locked at all.
            “Hello,” he called. His voice returned to him empty and pregnant with weird possibilities.
He stepped into the dark apartment. It was against his better judgment. The room reeked of ungodly odors-laboratory chemicals and a musty stench which meant the house had not been cleaned out in a while.

            “Kirk? Kirk! Are you in here?”


Notes to myself:
Zraeli found a note on the table from Kirk to whom it may concern. It described an experiment gone awry. He’d trapped DNA from fossilized skeleton of a Dimetrodon and tried to see if he could reinvent these reptiles by combining their DNA with slugs’. Finally, when he couldn’t control them anymore, (they reproduced quicker than he could keep count) he’d set them loose around the house. And now, something else had happened their bite was contagious. Anybody who suffers a bite from any of the creatures (his creatures) will be transmuted into one of them.

Zraeli had not finished reading the notes (there were about five pages in all. The last one could have contained a Remedy or a cure of sorts) when he heard a shrill scream. It came from the direction of his house. It was the voice of one of his daughters. It was the scream of someone who had just stumbled on their won obituary in the evening papers. It was the sound that only somebody who had looked their own death in the eye could make. Zraeli tossed the papers containing the last notes of Kirk away and scrambled for the door.

A monstrosity with a human head and a prehistoric reptile’s body slithered into his path and rammed into the door. Zraeli stared at it for what seemed like eons then, surprise tipped over to familiarity. Kirk? Kirk is that you?

Wednesday, June 27, 2012

DAY 27: Mutant Strains



The very first night Kirk decided to live the rest of the evening inside a bottle was by all means, the same he made the worst mistake of his life. The devil definitely knows how to catch us with our pants down. It was the worst of times for Kirk. Under the dim and convoluting lights of the joint, Kirk wasn’t quite what you would call at home with himself.

He’d had enough booze to sail the Titanic. In a few days, Kirk would hardly recall the high points of this night. After wearing himself out on the dance floor, Kirk took a stool by the bar. And somebody who’d probably being watching him for the perfect time to make his move took the stool beside him.
            “Hey, buddy. Wanna play a little game?” It was the devil in human cloak.

And the game was that the guy set up the worst pick up line and Kirk tried to see if he could get a girl for the night. The wager? Just 500 bucks plus the lady, if Kirk won. And if he loses?
            “Your soul would do just fine,” the man in the tweed coat said.


Notes to myself:
Does Kirk win?
What if he wins and the devil still takes his soul? (It’s The Devil we’re talking about here.) Can he be trusted to come through with his end of the bargain?
I’m tinkering with the idea of allowing the guy (Kirk) win and the devil comes back after him in the future out of vengeance for being outwitted. Possibly, after Kirk’s son.
But, there’s also the possibility (now, let’s say Kirk’s into biotechnology. Can I use that. Can The Devil use that?
How about the woman? What role does she play in the whole affair? Does she know about the game or is she a case of being in the wrong place at the right time?

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Tuesday, June 26, 2012

DAY 26: Presque Vu



There’s a guy sitting on a park bench reading a newspaper. Our interest is the paper not the guy cause the paper got news for your soul. The Presque Vu (that’s the name of the newspaper) disseminates truth that cuts like a knife. And our guy, he’s smart to be reading such a paper at this hour of the evening. Oh yeah, smart as a cat in a trash can.

Let’s get on with our story shall we?  The man’s name is Zaire, by the way. It’s actually Zaire’s first time of reading this paper. He met a man sitting on that bench-that was a while ago before you came along, and . . .
            “Hey, well met fellow,” Zaire said.
            “Hi there!” said the fellow.
            “I see you got the evening paper. What’s news?”
The guy, whose name we shouldn’t allow to ruffle our feathers at the present, shoved the paper over to Zaire. Zaire took it, scanned the headlines, flipped it open and began to read. The next moment this strange guy got up and started to leave.

            “Your paper, sir.” Zaire thrust the paper which he’d hurriedly closed towards the stranger.
            “Oh, never mind,” said the man. “I’m yet to see a story in the papers deserving a second read.”

And just like that the paper switched ownership. But, what Zaire was yet to find out which we’ll find out along with him was that there was more to the paper the stranger was not telling.
He opened the paper a second time and continued his reading. Of course, it was full of the usual stuff-sadist stuff. The stock market was a mess (as usual); a group of scientists proved rats descended from fleas (duh); and so on and so forth.

The part where the whole mess started falling apart was when Zaire started sensing something beyond the ordinary in the local news section. It felt wrong. He felt wrong.



Notes to myself:
What does Zaire do when he discovers everything he reads in the paper happens at the same time he reads it?
That the only way to stop those things is to stop reading the paper?
That he just read a while ago about the death of a loved one?
What if he’s got to find somebody else interested in reading the paper and pass it on or something fatal happens?

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Monday, June 25, 2012

DAY 25: The Cestus Code



Willow stepped into her bedroom and made a dash for her cell. The screen was just going off. This was the cell with her more popular number. She gave the number of this phone out often as her business number. She hadn’t felt like taking it along on her walk in the park. Willow really needed to work her body and rest her mind so she would be ready for her muse when she by the time she got back to the house.

Perspiration stood out on her forehead and arms like great balls of crystal freckles. She looked like she’d done a sprint around the block not once but six or seven times. She picked up the phone and saw the call was actually a notification. Email notifications from social networks. She flicked through the messages and when she got to the third message she froze. The first was an update from a Facebook friend, the second message contained a +1 of her comment by one of her circles on Google +. But the third message grabbed her attention by the lapels and shook it until all the bones in her body rattled when she shuddered.

Willow was so excited she felt like biting a big chunk out of something. The #mention was from a guy who claimed to be a representative of a big time film production company. Willow had been trying (without success, if I may add) to get her book turned into a movie. She was well beyond the limits of her wits. And now this; an opportunity that could only be termed a breakthrough.

Willow couldn’t recall if she ever sent out her proposal to the studio this guy was representing but since the diner they were meeting at was close by and she probably knew half the staff working there by first name she agreed to meet this strange personality in person.

The meeting never happened. The diner was a decoy, after all. The guy, Homer Gates, was a chronic schizophrenic who had delusions that everything and therefore, everyone in the world was against him. Willow had written a book she titled The Cestus Code about a woman who finds her place in the family and decides to follow it but the man of the house would hear none of it. Trouble came when the lady who was a writer herself decides to walk away from the marriage. The hubby is enraged when he finds out and a fight ensues.

The lady has her way in the end and becomes the writer she hungered to be. A few years later, somebody finds the woman dead on the bank of a canal; her corpse washed up by the flood tide. It’s a kind of whodunit story. Naturally, all eyes turn on the husband as accusing fingers point everywhere.

This man (the fake publisher guy who @mentions Willow asking for a meeting) kidnapped Willow and took her to a remote location. His real life story is quite similar to Willow’s fictional plot line.

            “Where the hell did you get that story?”
Of course, Willow’s dumbstruck. If you’re a fiction writer and somebody picked you out and asked ‘Where the hell do you get your stories from?’ with a Glock 18 plugged into one of your ears and you know you don’t know then, you understand Willow’s dilemma.

Well, Willow tried to explain herself, it sounded a bit like a creative writing class in her own ears.
            “You write a hell of a story, you know that?” The man said. “I thought you heard my story from someplace and change one or two things to achieve your version. Man, I gotta admit I had plans for you.”
Willow didn’t dare ask what plans. She knew better.
            “I want you to write my story,” The man said. “It’s close to what you got in your book, novels you call ‘em right? I want to write mine. Like it really happened. Cause it did. But I never killed my wife, okay? I loved Amy so much but she just wanted to go on with her fiction stuff. So we parted ways. But I never touch a hair on her head. When they found her she was cut into so many bits they couldn’t recognize. But the bastards thought I did it. Of course, the jury didn’t buy their story. So, I want you to write my story. Tell the world the truth.”
            “Look buddy, I don’t know what you got in mind but I got a family waiting for me to come home and fix their dinner . . .” Willow stopped in mid-sentence. Now the Glock changed position. It moved to the bulge of her forehead.
            ‘Don’t play that card. If you ever want to see your family again plus, if you’re ever gonna convince me what you got in that freaking book of yours ain’t the story of my life then, write my story. This is non-fiction and this gun’s real baby.” He pointed the muzzle of the gun to her eyes so she could take a peek. To Willow it was 6 feet deep. “Now do as I tell you. Don’t make me tell you twice!”

So, Willow stayed in captivity and wrote under the worst editor a man could ask for-a memoir based on the ordeal of this psycho (of course, she never mentioned the guy was a psycho in the manuscript). For the first time she’d come to see writing as a way back to life.


Notes to myself:
Much of the story’s told. Just work in the dialogue.
And the lady’s working conditions in hostage situation.
Does she finish the story?
Does the psycho kill her?

Sunday, June 24, 2012

DAY 24: Next Door to Dead


A man wearing a polo shirt with an alligator on the tit strolled up the walkway, climbed the stoop in three quick steps and, looked both ways down the lawn to see if anyone was watching. Of course, no one was.

A knock on the door caught Lucy off-guard. Not surprisingly, when she checked the clock it said 11:45 p.m. Who in limbo would pay me a visit at this time of day? She wondered, not without a bit of necessary suspicion. Lucy was trying to make up her mind if she should just ignore the knock and go back to sleep (it was past her bedtime) when her uninvited guest got her decided by hammering on her door like a really upset kid who returned home from school to discover momma had left for work and forgot to put the key under the flower pot by the door or under the door mat.

If you don’t come answer the door miss, the pounding seemed to say. I’m gonna wake up all ya neighbors. And really, one of the neighborhood dogs had begun to let out a woof. What Lucy didn’t want was for Mrs. Rosa, the woman next door, to come tell her to answer her door with her sonorous voice. Lucy dragged her butt out of bed. She hated having to stay awake past her bedtime. It was one of her pet peeves.

Lucy hesitated for the space of 60 seconds when she got to the door. She was a single woman who lived alone; she was vulnerable. The consciousness of her situation came upon her like a heavy blanket. She almost turned on the lights but thought the better of it. I can’t imagine any of my friends visiting at this hour, she thought, as she turned and did a recheck of the time, picking out the clock, hung above her plasma on the wall by the streak of light that peeped in through the crack in the curtain. It is midnight! She exclaimed under her breath.

Burglars were unheard of in her part of town and that seemed to give her a little relief that whoever it was wasn’t there to rob her. Yet, she felt the alarm called sixth sense going off inside her. Could it be possible that? . . . The thought sent shudders through her. What if one her courtroom cases had instigated such hate to warrant an attempt on her life? (Lucy was a lawyer.) And now, that she brought her mind to bear on this new fact, terror seized her in a deathly grip. She’d won a case for a guy once. He was to inherit about a million bucks from his former boss. On his way home, the guy was paid a visit by the bomb squad-the mob’s version.

Great drops of sweat soaked into her pajamas that Lucy looked as if she had fallen into the bathtub while reaching for her robe. She reached for the door again then, as an afterthought picked up a side stool and held it up like a player set to receive a service in a tennis match. For some odd reason she couldn’t explain, she didn’t feel like calling the cops. Lucy unlocked the door by only a squeak leaving the latch on. And stepped back to about 8 meter safety radius incase the stranger decided to kick in the door.

Lucy called out in a voice that didn’t quite sound like her own to her ears, “Who are you and what the hell do you want?”
            “Just me. I got a message for you.”
Lucy tried to place the voice, where had she heard it before. She didn’t think she recognized it from anywhere. But, something else began to happen; her fears began to subside. Somehow, she felt she could trust this person even though she had never seen him before.
            “I got a message,” the stranger repeated. “It’s for you.”
            “Well, slide it in. I’ll grab it from here.” She still wasn’t too willing to give in to the prodding of instinct.
            “I can’t exactly do that, Ma’am.” Shuffling of feet like the guy didn’t know exactly how to proceed. “It’s not exactly a package. It’s a word-of-mouth kind of message.”
            “Can’t you just spit it out and get it over with? Do you gatto be inside to do it? And who sent you?” The last question came by a sudden bust of inspiration.

Eventually, Lucy let the guy in. He was from the future and he’d come to warn Lucy about a case. She was to pass it up or it might turn out to be fatal for her and her future family. But the guy who was bringing the case to Lucy was innocent and he would go to jail if Lucy passed it up.


Notes to myself:
How I work in the dramatic ending is left for the rewrite.
Will Lucy take the case or let it go?
Will the man from the future help her?
What relation does she have with the guy from the future? (Should there be any ties?)
Could I make him Lucy’s future husband but who is forbidden to tell her that bit of info on this assignment or she dies automatically in the future?
What if she’s in critical condition and her husband asked for one more chance to set things right and he is sent to the past to warn her by The Doorkeeper (a mysterious figure who appears and offers to help)?
What if Lucy doesn’t take the chance?

Saturday, June 23, 2012

DAY 23: Reverse Entropy



Last night, I was scared out of my wits and did nothing and my fears fed my paralysis. Tonight, I broke that paralysis and went upstairs. Qué será será. What you are about to read leans heavily on certainty and understanding than it does on belief. It’s what I’ve come to call, reverse entropy. We ain’t talking possibilities here, people. This is less known reality and is not less real than what’s commonly called reality.

I was raised on fairy tales and fantasies. And I grew up on tales from the Roman Myths and Legends. They were a part of my daily young life, as much as lessons from my school texts were. You wouldn’t blame me for believing in monsters and ogres and Aladdin’s lamp if your childhood library could boast half the stuff mine was loaded with. The reality of these things was so close to the bone that I think that sometimes, I went to bed half-expecting to wake up to find, standing in my bedroom with lips peeled back to reveal nightmarish canine, the big bad wolf. And of course, ready to make dinner out of me.

I don’t have to paint you a more graphic illustration, do I? I believed that Cinderella’s glass slipper existed and was stowed away somewhere in the medieval regions of Europe. I believed a lot of things that would have made a sworn sadist crack up until his belly ached.

Have I ever considered the option that my fears triggered my monster into existence? Sure, sure I have. But the real question is do I believe that option; the veritability of its assumption? Answer: insufficient data. Faith, belief and fear sometimes, give the unreal or supernatural access into our vital breathing spaces. No doubt about that. But, whether that could be applied to my circumstance was another issue.

When I was little, I used to call under my bed, Kingdom of the Underbed because I could have sworn (if I was permitted to do it that was) monsters lived there. And here’s something else I believed; I believed the barest gears of our psyche are greased by the oil of the fairy tales we heard and read in our growing years. All the clogs and nuts of our being and faculty which remain serviceable are functions of the morals and realities gleaned off folklores heard in the weak glow of long ago moonlights.

I’m a man now and do not need to sit between the legs of a great uncle to listen to tales of faraway lands. I am mature now and know such things are behind me. Heck, that’s what I thought until last night. Last night was the eve of my birthday-my thirtieth.

The Kingdom of the Underbed for me, had always held its fascinations. What, with all the little chaps of the rodent family playing their games of Hide and Seek. But last night was different. The noises I heard coming from under my bed could not have been produced by a million rats clustered together under there. My childhood monster was back.

Trafalgar True is supposedly a sweet and friendly dragon but, that knowledge was not strong enough to keep the scream from busting out from me nor did it help any when my legs decided to flee down the flight of stairs taking four steps a time.

So, tonight I went back up there to my room with the belief that childish faith is stronger than adultish terror when you came right down to it. And true enough I was right. Trafalgar True was still true to his sweet nature. And he had a message for me.

I have written this note in case I do not make it back on time for Christmas.


Trafalgar True is a children’s fantasy by Stephen Cosgrove. And is available on google books and Amazon.


Notes to myself:
Add dialogue between the main character and the dragon.
Did the dragon (Trafalgar True) pop out from under the bed (Kingdom of the Underbed, as the character calls it) or was there a portal, something for the character to use as a door when returning with the dragon.
Does the story end up as children’s fantasy or horror/fantasy?
Add the Dragon’s Message and remember to make it the driving force of the plot.
Will the kith and kin in the Cosgrove story feature in the final draft or will Trafalgar take the character to some other fantasy realm?

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Friday, June 22, 2012

DAY 22: Creeping Easy



It was Mark Twain who said a novel was a confession to everything by a man who had never done anything.
My story doesn’t run the length of a novel-that’s at least 50,000 words last time I checked. Nevertheless, it’s a confession of sorts by a man who had done nothing through inaction or if I had to go the whole nine yards, through indifference.

I used to teach at a troubled children school just down the block. Let me tell you something, I knew a lot of kids back then who would have come to nothing if they were given ten shots at life placed the length of their noses. And then, there were those kids who were in the box because their family couldn’t keep up the love. Victims of a home that’s gone to hell in a hand basket.

Gary fell into the second group. A ruddy, solemn, tall drink of water who had his future cut out for him right from the word go. But Fate has us in the palms of his hands. The day Gary came to Queenstown College I knew a gem was about to be lost. I don’t know how I knew but I did know. The kid didn’t belong in that place.

It was like Gary also knew something was up because he did try to turn over a new leaf. I’d know more of that, if would were could. But before that time, he ran with the wrong pack and made a real mess of a pitiable existence.

I watched that kid through the windows of the staff room from up the second floor of the Administrative Building of Queenstown College. Watched him carry on through like tomorrow was here. I should have stepped in and curbed his enthusiasm when he started hanging around that kid from the Double B Fellowship. But you know they didn’t call that college a school for troubled children for nothing. Some of those kids would be serving time if they was old enough.

I don’t know how he managed it really, but Gary stopped trucking with that cult completely. In Queenstown, when a student decides to stop culting and start a new life, we called it creeping easy. I saw him in the library a few times, reading poetry. He was always going through the works of two great poets. It never ceased to amaze me how he was able to work out such chemical imbalance (the poets’). One was totally off the bend and living next door to hell’s industrious crew (Sylvia Plath) and the other always had a song flung up to heaven and still she rises (Maya Angelou). Maybe, Gary believed the works of these poets helped him understand both the light and dark side of his personality. If so, I prayed that he wouldn’t throw all his weight on the Sylvia Plath Option and tip over the tables all the way to suicide.

And yet the devil came. The cult Gary once belonged to had a clash with some other gang. These kids around these parts used weapons for gang fights-clubs and daggers. Luckily, none of them was ever spotted carrying firearm through out my stay at the college.

This is a confession to everything by a man who had never done anything to rescue a promising young life from the clutches of his own peer group.

Three teenagers are being questioned after a 15 year old boy was stabbed to death near his school. – News.



Notes to myself:
Of course, I’m gonna get this story smokin’ n’ tokin’ in the final draft:
Give the narrator (teacher) a name;
Name at least, one of the cult members.
Is there a need to state the family feud that created Gary’s emotional state?

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Thursday, June 21, 2012

DAY 21: Full Circle



Girls, just want to have fun.
Carey froze in the act of turning the knob. Where in the world had he heard those words before? And why should it send shivers through his spine as if his body had just been plugged into a wall socket? He tried to shake the sensation that seemed to be holding him in temporary paralysis. Does the name Cyndi Lauper ring your bell? His thought seemed to ask him. Of course, the female pop singer had a hit which went by the title. Carey reckoned that wasn’t grounds to set a man’s nerves on edge.

Girls, just want to have fun, the parakeet repeated. Something is not right about that song, Carey thought and slipped out the door heading for work.

By the time he returned in the evening, Carey had forgotten all about the words of his parrot. But, as he stepped across the threshold the scent of Rebelle hit him like the return of a painful memory or like the fragrance coming off a rotting corpse. Carey never used the perfume, couldn't. It was for women. Somebody broke into my house while I was away. His lips tightened into a thin line.

Carey searched the entire structure for an intruder and found nobody. He checked to see if something had been stolen or broken. Nothing. What the hell was he looking for? He asked himself. Carey’s house was a little out of the way and stood on an expansive stretch of lawn.

Girls, just want to have fun. The parakeet’s words threw a jump into him. What in the world was wrong with girls having fun? He knew he had nothing against that. And yet something didn’t feel right. Caution kept tugging at the heartstrings of his survival instincts. It was almost like a fire siren going off on his insides. Red Alert! Red Alert! Red Alert! That perfume . . . Rebelle. Where had he come across it? Was it even important if he recalled the personality who used it back then? Was it a former girlfriend of his?

Carey got rid of the day’s clothes and after a hot shower, he sat in front of his TV to watch the soaps. A  Breaking News was running. Two convicts had escaped from the federal maximum security facility. One had been caught, the other, a woman was still at large. She was last seen heading west in a black Honda Element-stolen, of course. Her name is . . .

He had heard enough. And the feeling had finally come home, full circle.
“Carrie,” he said, and shivered like he had the shakes.

The scent of Rebelle at that moment was cloying. Then, as if in reply to his calls, Carey heard footfalls muffled by the rug covering coming down the stairs. He didn’t have to wonder who the feet belonged to. At one time, they had been partners who hacked high-security main frames and stole chips containing confidential info only to resell them to high tech companies at huge prices.

The last time she was here they had been in the sitting room on the same sofa Carey now occupied. The DVD was playing an old school by the pop artist, Cyndi Lauper. The parakeet had been hers and she was always saying those words that had been bugging Carey for some time now to it. The parakeet had not spoken those words for the past ten years since his former partner had been jailed. Carey had betrayed her to the cops when his cover was almost blown. And now she had escaped. And she was back.

            “Payback’s a bitch,” Carrie said.
Girls, just want to have fun, the parakeet said.


Notes to myself:
Flesh out this story in the rewrite.
Does Carrie need a longer backstory?
Is there need to go into details about the heist that got Carrie jailed and turned Carey into a betrayer?